Close-Reading Bingo

1.) Our first mistake comes from I think therefore I am! When this know it all says "The common language doesn't detract from the poetic melody of the sergeants thoughts." this is too vague and is a classic mistake.

2.) The second mistakes is  brought to us by Happy Go Lucky! when they say  "Maybe, they were said nonchanlty, if anything." this sentence is in past tense and is a big no no.

3.) Third spot is lucky enough to go to Keep It Classy when this classy person put "The narrator briefly discusses his “lousy childhood” and “all that David Copperfield kind of crap." this person forgot the proper puncuations. How emberassing.

4.) And last spot goes to...Doctor Von Brown in a way i honestly don't even understand. Finally, the diction of the first page in John Steinbeck's The Winter of Our Discontent is in the fourth quadrant. Idon't know what this doctor is trying to get across and it wayy to vague.


M y top choice of the day...
BOOK WORM DAYS!  I really enjoyed when their opening sentence In The Secret Life of Bees Kidd exhibits a musical, soft diction that exemplifies the sad atmosphere that surrounds the main character, Lily...They did such a good job and i am just soo proud of them! Congratulations Book Worm!

Practice Diction Analysis

Mr. Hill has asked for a complete, yet brief, close reading of "The Mezzanine" by Nicholson Baker so here goes nothing!

In this short excerpt from "The Mezzanine", Baker provides detailed imagery that depicts the scene of the lobby. Baker describes as the escalator as "They were the free standing kind: a pair of integral signs swooping upward between the two floors they served without struts or piers to bear any intermediate weight" and  he tells us that "On sunny days like this one, a temporary, steeper escalator of daylight, formed by intersections of the lobby's towering volumes of marble and glass, met the real escalators just above their middle point, spreading into a needly area of shine where it fell against their brushed-steel side-pannels, and adding long glossy highlights to each of the black rubber handrails" By using such imagery and specific details, one is able to clearly paint a picture of the lobby in their minds.

Thus far...

Thus far I have formed my own opinion on who I believe knows more about Danes than they are letting on. I believe it was Ines. She cares a great deal for Nina, Danes ex, and Billy, Danes and Ninas son. I think she would do anything to make Danes go away and lessen Nina's fiery temper. She tries to hide behind her Mexican accent and look completely sweet and innocent, but it can't fool me! Everybody else seems too obvious. However, thus far in the novel March seems to be at a stand still. It seems as if nothing new or unpredictable has happened. Im half way through and was expecting some sort of lead about who knows what happen to Danes. But nope. Nothing. Well guess I'll just have to keep reading! That's the word on the streets. fresh money out.

Currently

This week I continued  to read Death's little helps by peter Spiegelman. So far it was proven to be a good read, though i am only a hundred pages in I have managed to form my own opinion of the mystery of Dane's disappearance. But instead of revealing my opinions, Mr. Hill has asked us to look at our fellow bloggers and see some of the best sentences of their "Style Mapping" assignment. Top five include...

!.) Our top sentences comes from Kims Corner! She is reading "The Virgin Suicide" and states that "In Neil's excerpt he writes in a style that is dull and archaic as he describes that stoney features of the town of Wall"

2.) The second spot goes to Eddie! She is reading "Blood Meridian" and tells us that  McCarthy "uses figurative language to also describe his fear of citizenry and uses vast diction to add a old fashion appearance to the novel."

 3.) Our third place goes to T-Rex who is also reading "Blood Meridian" and she tells us that  
" describes the early morning dusk with low connotating language to convey the hash and gentle setting of the exert"

4.) In fourth place comes RocketGuild who is reading Star Dust. RocketGuild tells us that "The diction is fragile and overlaps a light use of figuratuve language. The passage includes mildy sweet language such as "granite amidtst a small forest woodland." in the story

5.) At last place, the loser of the bunch who wasn't good enough for the top four spots, comes from Becca's blog! yay! Becca is reading The Things they carried and she says "

The elevation of his diction is pretty average - not rude or flowery - and the sound can be described as both grating and melodious as he switches between describing the horrors and beauties of war."

Well that's the word on the streets folks. Fresh Money out

Who do you think it is?

Names of suspects on March's "Peoples who might know more than they are letting on possibly even abducted Danes" list:
1.) Nina Sachs-angry lesbian ex-wife of Greg Danes. She seems to be a very mean and ill tempered lady who could snap and any moment. She decided calling the cops would lead to a scandal and private eye was the way to go. Perhaps she believes taking in the innocent approach is the best alibi?

2.) Ines-angry lesbians new lady friend.Personally, i believe she is too nice to commit such a crime. But its always the nice ones you have to look out for.

3.)Ms. Pratt-Work associate of Danes. Her whole world revolves around the stock market, and when Danes led her business into the ground she was bitter. But how bitter?

4.)Dennis Turpin- Worked with Danes. before he went missing Turpin and Danes had a brawl and Danes went storming out of the building. He's been acting hostile and very tempered when it comes to March's investigation It would be almost too obvious to point the finger at him, but sometimes our eyes miss the most obvious things.

5.) Linda Sovitch- a beautiful news reporter that had a relationship with Danes after his divorce. The married reporter has a big reputation and would lose a lot by hurting Danes. However, when March introduced this journalist it was apparent she was holding back. Will her spotlight reveal and even bigger truth? 

...Who do you think it is?

Style Mapping

A rainy day has brought us to lazy blogging in class today. We've been asked to depict and compare the style of writing among three books we have read. Each book has its own voice. My three choices are :Into the Wild, Death's Little Helpers, and Crank. Into the Wild tells a true and humbling story of Christopher McCandless and his quest to alaska. The words on the pages create a  language of denotative tone and sound almost journalistic as if I was reading a two hundred page newpapers article. But none the less, Jon Krakauer manages to create a sad melody with the explanation of Chris McCandless's death. Death's Little Helpers has a melody to it as well but the melody is almost haunting and gives the reader a chill down his or her back. The author comes across as both vulgar and blunt at the same time. However, crank brings writing that is very different to the table. Crank tells a story entirely in poem from. The language is dark and haunting, and creates both heart ache and fear. The author writes in a strictly connotative language.

Another new book

Here we have a new novel to this Fresh Money blog. Death's Little Helpers is a mystery about the disappearance of Gregory Danes.  Described by his ex-wife Greg was a lousy husband and an even lousier father. With a long list of enemies it's no wonder that Greg that went missing. However, is it really as dangerous as people are making it seem. Gregory had a shameful face and reputation that is far from sparkling,perhaps his embarrassment finally caught up with him? That's up to  John March, well known for getting the job done, detective. John has had his share of dangerous business taken too far. Four years ago his wife was brutally murdered by men who decided March knew too much. But he has given his  heart time to heal and has found new love. Jane has experienced March's business and she knows the risk of falling in love with John, but the heart wants what the heart wants. But will her heart lead  her down a dangerous road? Perhaps John will realize yet again what risks are taken when duty calls.